В этом уроке мы сократим количество слов в семи готовых эссе.
Тема 1:
Friendship is the greatest gift of life.
Nowadays, there is an opinion that friendship is one of the best presents which our life gives us, while others do not agree with this point of view.
(28 слов)
In my opinion, (it is wonderful to have friends as) friendship is an exceptional gift which our life offers. Firstly, I believe that (most people realize that) our friends’ attitude gives us happiness (and joy) as any present does. We usually have a lot in common with our friends and this means that our communications (and all free time we spend together) are valuable (and enjoyable) for us. Secondly, friendship (is more than hanging out together; it) is an opportunity to get help from your friend if you need it. For instance, (I am sure that) any person in the world would get to the friend (or a member of the family) to ask for help in a critical (or difficult) situation. Friends give us moral support, lend us money, look after our (children or) pets.
(136 слов минус 43 слова)
Others claim that friendship is important but they would not call it a gift. They think that as your mates are able to help you, you have to stand up for them too, so they would rather call friendship a mutually beneficial cooperation (not a gift).
(46 слов минус 3 слова)
(While those are important things to consider, ) I do not agree with the opposing view. I am sure that cooperation does not involve emotional connection which exists among real friends.
(30 слов минус 7 слов)
To sum up, I believe it would be perfect to have friends, count on their support and spend great time together sharing common interests and hobbies.
(26 слов)
ИТОГО
в черновике — 266 слов ( а это значит, что первоначальную версию можно и оставить)
в сокращенной версии — 213 слов (тоже приемлиемое количество).
Тема 2:
Childhood is not the best time of one’s life.
Nowadays, there is an opinion that childhood years are the hardest period of our life, while other people claim that it is absolutely wrong.
(24 слова)
In my opinion, the time when we are young is the easiest (and the most interesting) part of our life. Firstly, I believe that (most people realize that) youngsters do not have many responsibilities and this period of our life is the most carefree time. For example, children do not have to care about food, money and place for living, their parents do it instead of them. Secondly, (it is more than absence of responsibilities,) it is an opportunity to discover the world and find out something new every day. I think that girls and boys’s life is much more exiting than routine time being of adults.
(107 слов минус 15 слов)
Some people believe that it would be great to have a happy childhood but they are not sure that everybody has it. They think that parents could limit their children’s desires, choices (and aspirations) in order to protect them. As a result, schoolchildren do activities they are not interested in and they study subjects they hate.
(56 слов минус 2 слова)
(While those are important things to consider,) I do not (completely) agree with the opposing view. I think that parents’ limitations are based on their great life experience. Parents’ control must exist as a form of protection from the mistakes of youth.
(42 слова минус 8 слов)
In conclusion, I believe that childhood is the best time of our life as we do not need to worry about our basic needs.
(24 слова)
ИТОГО
в черновике — 253 слова ( а это значит, что первоначальную версию можно и оставить)
в сокращенной версии — 228 слов (тоже приемлиемое количество).
Тема 3:
One should not pay too much attention to fashion.
Nowadays, there is an opinion that everybody has to pay a lot of attention to fashionable trends, while others say that is not worth doing it.
(26 слов)
I believe that it would be a great idea to buy (and wear) clothes (which suit you and show your identity) not taking into account the latest fashion trends. Firstly, I believe that (most people realize that) fashionable clothes cost a lot and it is expensive to be fashionable all the time. For instance, fashion houses release their new collections at least twice a year, that means that to be trendy you have to update your wardrobe every season and spend a lot of money on the latest models. Secondly, (fashion is not only the high price,) it is a chance to buy and wear items which absolutely do not suit you. For example miniskirts (or tight jeans) which were recently in fashion are not for every age and every type of body.
(133 слова минус 23 слова)
Others claim that it would be a great idea to be into fashion and wear trendy clothes. They are sure that it is beneficial for everybody to have a sense of belonging to the high social status community. For example, if you can afford to buy Chanel clothes, it means that you are (successful and) wealthy.
(56 слов минус 2 слова)
(While those are important things to consider), I do not agree with the opposing view. There are a lot of examples in the modern world when the wealthiest people wear the simplest clothes, while not very reach ones try to make a good impression by dressing in the expensive brands. Everybody remembers Steve Jobs who put on the same black long-sleeved jumpers every day (but nobody knows others in fashionable items of clothing).
(73 слова минус 14 слов)
To sum up, I think that your personal style and clothes that suit you are much more important than following fashionable trends.
(22 слова)
ИТОГО
в черновике — 310 слов! ( а это значит, что эссе необходимо сокращать!)
в сокращенной версии — 271 слово (приемлиемое количество).
Тема 4:
One should read about historical sights before sightseeing.
Nowadays, there is an opinion that it is useful to find out about tourist attractions in advance,while others believe that there is no need to do it.
(28 слов)
I believe that it would be a great idea to learn more about the places of interests in advance. Firstly, I believe (that most people realize) that preparation before the trip will save you time. For example, knowing what we want to see (and how to get there) will definitely help you to avoid losing time on the things you are not interested in (and on the wrong way to the destination). Secondly, (it is not only saving time,) it is also an opportunity to save money. You do not have to spend on the excursion or pay the guide; you are able to become a private guide for the company of your friends (or family members) yourself.
(118 слов минус 26 слов)
Some people believe that it is not necessary to look for any information before sightseeing. They think that getting information in advance spoils your own personal impression, doing it we look at the place from the point of view of the author and absorb his or her attitude. For example, we may adopt negative or unreasonably positive impression of the authors’ feedback.
(62 слова)
(While those are important things to consider,) I do not agree with the opposing view. If you are really interested in art you will definitely visit an art gallery even if the reviews were negative. A guided tour just gives you extra information about a painting and doesn’t influence your personal opinion.
(52 слова минус 7 слов)
To sum up, I would recommend to every person who is planning to travel to do some background researches about historical sights to save money and time.
(26 слов)
ИТОГО
в черновике — 286 слов! ( а это значит, что эссе необходимо сокращать!)
в сокращенной версии — 253 слова (приемлиемое количество).
Тема 5:
It is wrong to make pupils read a lot in summer time.
Nowadays, there is an opinion that it is extremely important to read in the summer months, while
other people claim that summer reading must be only optional.
(26 слов)
In my opinion, it is (absolutely) wrong to make children read during their summer holidays. Firstly, I believe that (most people realize that) summer holidays serve the idea of getting rid of stress students suffer during their school year, but compulsory summer reading maintains this level of (stress and) pressure. For example, the list of forty books for three months is able to make anybody become nervous. Secondly, it is not reading I argue with, it is the absence of opportunity to choose the book. Schoolchildren normally have to read classical literature, but many of them would rather read science fiction books (or detectives), but the pressure of reading is able to make them (rebellious and) read nothing at all.
(119 слов минус 11 слов)
Others claim that it would be a great idea to read a lot (while students have their free time) in the summer. It is beneficial for students to succeed in school test results, so they think that summer reading will help schoolchildren to get better marks next school year.
(49 слов минус 6 слов)
(While those are important things to consider,) I do not (completely) agree with the opposing view. (Probably), a lot of reading could (partially) improve your achievements in literature and Russian language but it has nothing to do with other subjects. Also it is (extremely) important not to make children hate mentioned subjects because of the need to read in summer time.
(61 слово минус 11 слов)
To sum up, I believe that it would be unfair to make students read a lot while they are having their summer holidays. I think it is more useful to give them a chance to choose activities and books they are really interested in.
(45 слов)
ИТОГО
в черновике — 300 слов! ( а это значит, что эссе необходимо сокращать!)
в сокращенной версии — 272 слова (приемлиемое количество).
Тема 6:
Science is the first thing to be financed in the modern world.
Nowadays, there is an opinion that nowadays science must be primarily funded, while others do not agree with this point of view.
(22 слова)
In my opinion, it is (extremely) important to pay a lot of attention to science (nowadays) and that means that it must be properly funded. Firstly, I believe (that most people realize) that thanks to scientific researches a lot of machines which make our everyday life easier were invented. It means that without money spent on studies in the future we hardly will be able to get robots controlling our cars (or our housekeeping). Secondly, (it is not only the question of our life simplification), proper budgeting of science is in opportunity to prolong life expectancy (of humanity) thanks to the medical research. For instance, millions of specialists are working on the problem of incurable diseases (like cancer) and without financial investment these types of problems will never be solved.
(131 слово минус 23 слова)
Some people believe that it would be a great idea to finance social sphere (or medicine) first, not science. They think that we could use public finances to solve more important priority tasks. For example, there are a lot of everyday problems our society faces like homeless or disabled people who we must help first.
(55 слов минус 2 слова)
(While those are important things to consider), I do not (completely) agree with the opposing view. All the solutions of social problems are connected to the science development one way or another. I strongly believe that only funding the science researches could help us to solve disabled and homeless people’s issues.
(51 слово минус 8 слов)
To sum up, I believe that it would be reasonable to finance science first in order to improve many spheres of our life tomorrow.
(24 слова)
ИТОГО
в черновике — 283 слова! ( а это значит, что эссе необходимо сокращать!)
в сокращенной версии — 250 слов (приемлиемое количество).
Тема 7:
The skill of handwriting will be unnecessary soon.
Nowadays, there is an opinion that the skill of handwriting will become useless in the very near future, while others do not agree with this point of view.
(28 слов)
In my opinion, the ability to write by hand will disappear shortly. Firstly, I believe (that most people realize) that taping with (the help of) a computer is faster and it saves a lot of time as we do not need to reprint the pages with mistakes (and errors). For example, with appearance of computers in the doctor’s offices we have to wait less our appointments in a queue. Secondly, absence of handwriting in many spheres of our life is (not only the matter of time, it) is (also) an opportunity to write a text which is legible for everybody. For example, if a teacher at school has a (bit) illegible handwriting, it might cause some confusions (and long lasting mistakes) of his or her pupils.
(125 слов минус 22 слова)
Other people believe that it will always be a great idea to be able to write beautifully (and legibly). They think that we could look at amazing handwriting as a form of art. For example, it is a real pleasure to get a well-organized letter with a lovely writing and keep it as a masterpiece.
(55 слов минус 2 слова)
(While those are important things to consider), I do not agree with the opposing view. There are better pieces of art, like sculptures and paintings, to be kept and protected than handwriting. It is only the simple act of keeping information (and it must be done in the fastest and easiest way).
(52 слова минус 18 слов)
In conclusion, I would like to underline that the skill of handwriting will be useless as the technological progress offers us much easier and faster ways for storing information.
(29 слов)
ИТОГО
в черновике — 289 слова! ( а это значит, что эссе необходимо сокращать!)
в сокращенной версии — 247 слов (приемлиемое количество).
Таким образом, без выделенных красным частей предложений ВСЕ ЭССЕ удовлетворяют нормам количества слов!
ПРЕДЫДУЩИЕ УРОКИ:
Урок 0: Много теории
Урок 1: Introduction/Вступление
Урок 2: My personal opinion/Мое мнение
Урок 3: Opposing view/Противоположное мнение
Урок 4: Why you don’t agree with the opposing opinion/Почемы не согласны
Урок 5: Conclusion/Заключение
Урок 6: Семь готовых эссе
Урок 7: Облегченные версии семи эссе
27 сентября, 2021 
Anna Zhilina 
